Saturday 7 April 2012

Poem 7: Wall

Laying the prefect brick
Mortar applied with a casual flick
One part cement to four parts sand
It's setting soon, you need to be quick

Levelled up with a steady hand
Horizontal even on sloping land
Perpendiculars buttered right
Each course follows what was planned

Beds even, perps not too tight
Soon we have a decent height
The final one a satisfying click
A simple wall brings such delight

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An exercise today, trying a new format:
"This Persian form of poetry is a series of rhymed quatrains. In each quatrain, all lines rhyme except the third. An "Interlocking Rubáiyát" is a Rubáiyát where the subsequent stanza rhymes its 1st, 2nd, and 4th lines with the sound at the end of the 3rd line in the stanza (Rubá'íyah) before it.
In this form, the 3rd line of the final stanza is also rhymed with the 3 rhymed lines in the first stanza.

a -NEW
a -2nd line rhymes with the 1st.
b -NEW
a -4th line rhymes with the 1st and 2nd.

b -1st line rhymes with the 3rd in the 1st stanza.
b -2nd line rhymes with the 1st.
c -NEW
b -4th line rhymes with the 1st and 2nd.

c -1st line rhymes with the third in the 2nd stanza.
c -2nd line rhymes with the 1st.
a -3rd line rhymes with the 1st in the 1st stanza.
c -4th line rhymes with the 1st and 2nd.
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3 comments:

Aging Ophelia said...

I've always liked that form, but never really did one on purpose, even in a creative writing course. Have to try it soon!

The rising of the wall, in its stages, is strangely alluring.

moi said...

You're hired! ;-)

moi said...

Put
/view/classic
behind your blog title

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